Please kindly proofread...
a...@accuser37.apu.edu
Please note that it contains a lot of computer terms. I want to be sure
that I didn't put any silly errors. I am not an English major [grin].
Note that I excluded putting my personal information for privacy. :)
Someone pointed out that "with" in "Involved with software
configuration management" should be "in". So it should say "Involved
in software configuration management". Any opinions on this phrase?
[Personal Information Snipped]
EDUCATION Azusa Pacific University, Azusa, CA
Bachelor of Science in Computer Science, May 1998
COMPUTER * Experienced with excellent computer skills in many
SKILLS software programs
* Over fifteen years of experiences with various
computer platforms
* Knowledge with Web design, graphic design, software
quality assurance, debugging, security, and online
technical support
COMPUTER Platforms/Systems: PC (WINDOWS/DOS/LINUX/UNIX) and Mac
EXPERIENCE Languages: HTML, CSS, JavaScript, C, C++, and ASP
Applications: Visual InterDev, Visual SourceSafe,
Internet Explorer, Netscape Navigator/Communicator,
Opera, Word, Excel, PowerPoint, Photoshop, Paint Shop
Pro, HomeSite, Dreamweaver, WebPosition Gold,
RealPlayer/RealEncoder, Easy CD Creator, plus many
others
WORK PropertyFirst.com, Alhambra, CA. Internet
EXPERIENCE (propertyfirst.com)
* Product Assurance Specialist & Web Developer/Designer
(December 1998 - March 2001)
+ Developed, designed, debugged, and deployed Web pages
and graphics for the Web sites
+ Participated in the development and usability testing
of Web and software products
+ Advised on innovative Web and software quality
assurance technologies to enhance Web sites
+ Created and managed test cases and bug reports
+ Involved with software configuration management
+ Provided technical support with other coworkers
The Jungle II Online, Glendora, CA. Internet
(jungleii.com)
* Coordinator (September 1994 - May 1998)
+ Maintained and coordinated files and file libraries
+ Provided weekly issues of file reviews online
+ Moderated chat sessions and message forums
+ Assisted clients and system operators with online
technical support via chat, emails, and forums
+ Hosted its first Web site on the Internet
Azusa Pacific University, Azusa, CA. Internet (apu.edu)
* University Marketing and Creative Media Intern
(September 1997 - April 1998)
+ Designed and managed Web pages for the university's
Web site
+ Created Web graphics
+ Data conversion and integration for Web site
databases
* Residence Life Webmaster (January 1996 - April 1998)
+ Designed and maintained the Residence Life Web pages
+ Answered email questions and made referrals for
further information
* Computer Support Volunteer (January 1995 - April 1998)
+ Troubleshooted and advised faculty members and
students
+ Reported problems and gave suggestions to the system
administrator
Hacienda La Puente Unified School District, La Puente,
CA. Internet (hlpusd.k12.ca.us)
* High School Web Designer (June - August 1996)
+ Designed La Puente High School's Web pages
+ Designed Valley Alternative Schools' Web pages
Youth Leadership Forum for Students with Disabilities,
Sacramento, CA
* Layout Editor (May - June 1996)
+ Designed an issue of Youth Leadership Forum Alumni
Newsletter
Chinese Outreach Christian Broadcasting, Alhambra, CA
* Volunteer (April - August 1995)
+ Created computer mailing lists
+ Entered data to the computers
+ Duplicated cassette tapes for distribution
OTHER MAJOR * Youth Leadership Forum for Students with Disabilities,
EXPERIENCE Sacramento, CA
Delegate (August 1993)
+ Sponsored by the California Governor's Committee for
Employment of Disabled Persons
+ Expanded awareness and an appreciation of physically
challenged individuals
HONORS AND * Recognition Award, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
AWARDS (August 2000)
* Recognition Award, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
(June 2000)
* Recognition Awards, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
(April 2000)
* Second Century Fund Scholarship Award, Alexander Graham
Bell Association for the Deaf. Washington, D.C., 1994
* Participation Award, Youth Leadership Forum for
Students with Disabilities. The California Governor's
Committee for Employment of Disabled Persons.
Sacramento, CA (August 1993)
* Special Award, Marked Progress in Academic Work and
Citizenship. Mesa Robles Junior High School. Hacienda
Heights, CA, 1990
* Second Place Award. Painting, oil or acrylic. 9th
Annual Puente Hills Art Festival, sponsored by Diamond
Bar Artist Guild. Diamond Bar, CA, 1990
* First Place Award, Painting, oil or acrylic. Junior
Fair, Los Angeles County Fair, Pomona, CA, 1987
* Blue Ribbon Award, Painting, water color. Junior Fair,
Los Angeles County Fair, Pomona, CA, 1987
REFERENCES * Available upon request
Thank you in advance for any feedbacks! :)
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Richard Fontana
> Please kindly proofread my resume for any spelling and grammar errors.
> Please note that it contains a lot of computer terms. I want to be sure
> that I didn't put any silly errors. I am not an English major [grin].
> Note that I excluded putting my personal information for privacy. :)
>
> Someone pointed out that "with" in "Involved with software
> configuration management" should be "in". So it should say "Involved
> in software configuration management". Any opinions on this phrase?
See my comments on this below.
> [Personal Information Snipped]
>
>
> EDUCATION Azusa Pacific University, Azusa, CA
> Bachelor of Science in Computer Science, May 1998
>
>
> COMPUTER * Experienced with excellent computer skills in many
> SKILLS software programs
"Experienced with ... skills" and "experienced in ... programs" are at
best awkward ways of phrasing what you're trying to say, and at worst they
are unidiomatic. Here's a possible rewording:
COMPUTER * Experienced in the use of many software
SKILLS programs
(This is resume language, bear in mind, so you can say it that way.)
You could add "Excellent computer skills." to the beginning of that
description, but then there's some redundancy since the heading is
"COMPUTER SKILLS".
> * Over fifteen years of experiences with various
> computer platforms
* Over fifteen years of experience with various
computer platforms
> * Knowledge with Web design, graphic design, software
> quality assurance, debugging, security, and online
> technical support
* Possess knowledge of Web design, graphic design,
software quality assurance, debugging, security, and
online technical support
> COMPUTER Platforms/Systems: PC (WINDOWS/DOS/LINUX/UNIX) and Mac
I can't see any justification for capitalizing "Windows" and
"Linux" there. Even if "UNIX" (which if I'm not mistaken is the
original trademarked form [?]) is more correct than "Unix", I think it's
usually written as "Unix", and in general you should be sparing in your
use of all-caps, much as on Usenet.
> EXPERIENCE Languages: HTML, CSS, JavaScript, C, C++, and ASP
> Applications: Visual InterDev, Visual SourceSafe,
> Internet Explorer, Netscape Navigator/Communicator,
> Opera, Word, Excel, PowerPoint, Photoshop, Paint Shop
> Pro, HomeSite, Dreamweaver, WebPosition Gold,
> RealPlayer/RealEncoder, Easy CD Creator, plus many
> others
I'd change the "plus" to "and".
>
> WORK PropertyFirst.com, Alhambra, CA. Internet
> EXPERIENCE (propertyfirst.com)
>
> * Product Assurance Specialist & Web Developer/Designer
Don't use the "&"; use "and".
> (December 1998 - March 2001)
>
> + Developed, designed, debugged, and deployed Web pages
> and graphics for the Web sites
"... for Web sites". "The" is wrong here. If
you mean "the company's website" then say that.
> + Participated in the development and usability testing
> of Web and software products
> + Advised on innovative Web and software quality
> assurance technologies to enhance Web sites
> + Created and managed test cases and bug reports
> + Involved with software configuration management
Hmm. Out of context I was going to say that "involved with" is incorrect,
but it doesn't really look too wrong to me here. I think there's a
difference, which is that "Involved in software configuration
management" sounds like you had a more active, responsible role, so for
that reason alone you might want to use "in". I suppose "involved
with" is slightly more colloquial, and some speakers might not use it at
all. (Of course, the usual meaning of "involved with" is "in a romantic
or sexual realtionship with".)
> + Provided technical support with other coworkers
>
> The Jungle II Online, Glendora, CA. Internet
> (jungleii.com)
>
> * Coordinator (September 1994 - May 1998)
>
> + Maintained and coordinated files and file libraries
> + Provided weekly issues of file reviews online
> + Moderated chat sessions and message forums
> + Assisted clients and system operators with online
> technical support via chat, emails, and forums
Get rid of "via". I'm not sure what the best substitute is. Maybe here
you could just say "using chat, email, and forums". Note that
"email" should be singular here.
> + Hosted its first Web site on the Internet
Hosted company's first Web site on the Internet
> Azusa Pacific University, Azusa, CA. Internet (apu.edu)
>
> * University Marketing and Creative Media Intern
> (September 1997 - April 1998)
>
> + Designed and managed Web pages for the university's
> Web site
> + Created Web graphics
> + Data conversion and integration for Web site
> databases
>
> * Residence Life Webmaster (January 1996 - April 1998)
>
> + Designed and maintained the Residence Life Web pages
You're using definite articles ("the") a bit more often than is
customarily done in resume-ese (even though you're correct as far as
ordinary usage goes), which is a bit jarring to me, but it's not such a
big deal. Here, for example, I'd expect
Designed and managed Residence Life Web pages
> + Answered email questions and made referrals for
> further information
>
> * Computer Support Volunteer (January 1995 - April 1998)
>
> + Troubleshooted and advised faculty members and
> students
"Troubleshooted" is unquestionably correct -- though it does
look a bit funny. I suspect, as with "tread water", it's not used much in
the past tense form. Maybe you should avoid using it. How about:
Handled troubleshooting; advised faculty members and students
Or maybe "Responsible for troubleshooting".
> + Reported problems and gave suggestions to the system
> administrator
>
> Hacienda La Puente Unified School District, La Puente,
> CA. Internet (hlpusd.k12.ca.us)
>
> * High School Web Designer (June - August 1996)
>
> + Designed La Puente High School's Web pages
> + Designed Valley Alternative Schools' Web pages
>
> Youth Leadership Forum for Students with Disabilities,
> Sacramento, CA
>
> * Layout Editor (May - June 1996)
>
> + Designed an issue of Youth Leadership Forum Alumni
> Newsletter
>
> Chinese Outreach Christian Broadcasting, Alhambra, CA
>
> * Volunteer (April - August 1995)
>
> + Created computer mailing lists
> + Entered data to the computers
Can't say "entered data to". How about: "Entered data". ("Computers" is
obvious.)
> + Duplicated cassette tapes for distribution
>
>
> OTHER MAJOR * Youth Leadership Forum for Students with Disabilities,
> EXPERIENCE Sacramento, CA
> Delegate (August 1993)
>
> + Sponsored by the California Governor's Committee for
> Employment of Disabled Persons
> + Expanded awareness and an appreciation of physically
> challenged individuals
Get rid of the "an" there.
> HONORS AND * Recognition Award, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
> AWARDS (August 2000)
> * Recognition Award, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
> (June 2000)
> * Recognition Awards, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
> (April 2000)
> * Second Century Fund Scholarship Award, Alexander Graham
> Bell Association for the Deaf. Washington, D.C., 1994
> * Participation Award, Youth Leadership Forum for
> Students with Disabilities. The California Governor's
> Committee for Employment of Disabled Persons.
> Sacramento, CA (August 1993)
> * Special Award, Marked Progress in Academic Work and
> Citizenship. Mesa Robles Junior High School. Hacienda
> Heights, CA, 1990
> * Second Place Award. Painting, oil or acrylic. 9th
> Annual Puente Hills Art Festival, sponsored by Diamond
> Bar Artist Guild. Diamond Bar, CA, 1990
> * First Place Award, Painting, oil or acrylic. Junior
> Fair, Los Angeles County Fair, Pomona, CA, 1987
> * Blue Ribbon Award, Painting, water color. Junior Fair,
> Los Angeles County Fair, Pomona, CA, 1987
>
>
> REFERENCES * Available upon request
>
>
>
> Thank you in advance for any feedbacks! :)
"Feedback".
All in all, not too many usage errors. I haven't, and won't, comment on
non-usage matters of style.
Franke
a...@accuser37.apu.edu wrote:
Please kindly proofread my resume for any spelling and grammar errors.
"Please kindly" just isn't English in this sentence. We
may "kindly criticize" or "kindly evaluate" or "kindly
judge", but we cannot "kindly read"--nor can we
"unkindly read".
Please note that it contains a lot of computer terms. I want to be sure
that I didn't put any silly errors. I am not an English major [grin].
Note that I excluded putting my personal information for privacy. :)
Yes, but you forgot about your .sig file, didn't you? It
leads us all to the original document with your name and
address.
Someone pointed out that "with" in "Involved with software
configuration management" should be "in". So it should say "Involved
in software configuration management". Any opinions on this phrase?[Personal Information Snipped]
EDUCATION Azusa Pacific University, Azusa, CA
Bachelor of Science in Computer Science, May 1998COMPUTER * Experienced with excellent computer skills in many
SKILLS software programs
* Over fifteen years of experiences with various
computer platforms
* Knowledge with Web design, graphic design, software
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Should be "Knowledge of", but you will need to be
explicit about the source of this knowledge. If it
is merely book knowledge, it should not go here. If
you have hands-on experience with all these things,
yoiu ought to list that experience in the next
section and delete this subsection.
quality assurance, debugging, security, and online
technical supportCOMPUTER Platforms/Systems: PC (WINDOWS/DOS/LINUX/UNIX) and Mac
EXPERIENCE Languages: HTML, CSS, JavaScript, C, C++, and ASP
Applications: Visual InterDev, Visual SourceSafe,
Internet Explorer, Netscape Navigator/Communicator,
Opera, Word, Excel, PowerPoint, Photoshop, Paint Shop
Pro, HomeSite, Dreamweaver, WebPosition Gold,
RealPlayer/RealEncoder, Easy CD Creator, plus many
others
Your Computer Skills and Computer Experience sections
are overlapping, and what you have here belongs in the
Skills section, I believe. However, it is better to
divide your computer skills into hardware and software
skills. And as it seems most of your work experience
has been computer-related, you can eliminate the
Computer Experience section and change the Work
Experience section to Computer-Related Work Experience.
Take a look at some computer-job resumes. There are
plenty of books out there that have them. I would
send you my old network engineer resume as an example,
but I discarded it about 5 years ago.
WORK PropertyFirst.com, Alhambra, CA. Internet
EXPERIENCE (propertyfirst.com)
More duplication of information here.
^^^^^^^^^
Should be "feedback".
a...@accuser37.apu.edu
> a...@accuser37.apu.edu wrote:
>> Please kindly proofread my resume for any spelling and grammar errors.
> "Please kindly" just isn't English in this sentence. We
> may "kindly criticize" or "kindly evaluate" or "kindly
> judge", but we cannot "kindly read"--nor can we
> "unkindly read".
Ah thanks. English is not my strong area. That is why I came here for
some help.
>> Please note that it contains a lot of computer terms. I want to be sure
>> that I didn't put any silly errors. I am not an English major [grin].
>> Note that I excluded putting my personal information for privacy. :)
> Yes, but you forgot about your .sig file, didn't you? It
> leads us all to the original document with your name and
> address.
True, but my online resume doesn't show the whole address [grin].
>> Someone pointed out that "with" in "Involved with software
>> configuration management" should be "in". So it should say "Involved
>> in software configuration management". Any opinions on this phrase?
>>
>> [Personal Information Snipped]
>>
>> EDUCATION Azusa Pacific University, Azusa, CA
>> Bachelor of Science in Computer Science, May 1998
>>
>> COMPUTER * Experienced with excellent computer skills in many
>> SKILLS software programs
>> * Over fifteen years of experiences with various
>> computer platforms
>> * Knowledge with Web design, graphic design, software
> ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
> Should be "Knowledge of", but you will need to be
> explicit about the source of this knowledge. If it
> is merely book knowledge, it should not go here. If
> you have hands-on experience with all these things,
> yoiu ought to list that experience in the next
> section and delete this subsection.
Well, it is for both.
>> quality assurance, debugging, security, and online
>> technical support
>>
>> COMPUTER Platforms/Systems: PC (WINDOWS/DOS/LINUX/UNIX) and Mac
>> EXPERIENCE Languages: HTML, CSS, JavaScript, C, C++, and ASP
>> Applications: Visual InterDev, Visual SourceSafe,
>> Internet Explorer, Netscape Navigator/Communicator,
>> Opera, Word, Excel, PowerPoint, Photoshop, Paint Shop
>> Pro, HomeSite, Dreamweaver, WebPosition Gold,
>> RealPlayer/RealEncoder, Easy CD Creator, plus many
>> others
> Your Computer Skills and Computer Experience sections
> are overlapping, and what you have here belongs in the
> Skills section, I believe. However, it is better to
> divide your computer skills into hardware and software
> skills. And as it seems most of your work experience
> has been computer-related, you can eliminate the
> Computer Experience section and change the Work
> Experience section to Computer-Related Work Experience.
> Take a look at some computer-job resumes. There are
> plenty of books out there that have them. I would
> send you my old network engineer resume as an example,
> but I discarded it about 5 years ago.
I actually copied this format from a Azusa Pacific University's
Career Center. The booklet had samples of computer-related resumes.
So, I don't know. This was back in 1998, so it is newer than yours
[grin].
Thank you for your advices. I appreciate your time for looking over my
resume.
--
"I like ants, in chocolate. Crunch, hummmm." --unknown
a...@accuser37.apu.edu
>>
>>
>> EDUCATION Azusa Pacific University, Azusa, CA
>> Bachelor of Science in Computer Science, May 1998
>>
>>
>> COMPUTER * Experienced with excellent computer skills in many
>> SKILLS software programs
> "Experienced with ... skills" and "experienced in ... programs" are at
> best awkward ways of phrasing what you're trying to say, and at worst they
> are unidiomatic. Here's a possible rewording:
> COMPUTER * Experienced in the use of many software
> SKILLS programs
> (This is resume language, bear in mind, so you can say it that way.)
I will use your wording.
> You could add "Excellent computer skills." to the beginning of that
> description, but then there's some redundancy since the heading is
> "COMPUTER SKILLS".
I don't think having "Excellent" sounds good. I think I will leave it out
unless someone else has another suggestion or agrees with you.
>> * Over fifteen years of experiences with various
>> computer platforms
> * Over fifteen years of experience with various
> computer platforms
Ok.
>> * Knowledge with Web design, graphic design, software
>> quality assurance, debugging, security, and online
>> technical support
> * Possess knowledge of Web design, graphic design,
> software quality assurance, debugging, security, and
> online technical support
Ok.
>> COMPUTER Platforms/Systems: PC (WINDOWS/DOS/LINUX/UNIX) and Mac
> I can't see any justification for capitalizing "Windows" and
> "Linux" there. Even if "UNIX" (which if I'm not mistaken is the
> original trademarked form [?]) is more correct than "Unix", I think it's
> usually written as "Unix", and in general you should be sparing in your
> use of all-caps, much as on Usenet.
Hmm... This one is tough to decide. I noticed in the resume samples,
it had CAPS. Maybe the CAPS was to catch the employer's eyes?
>> EXPERIENCE Languages: HTML, CSS, JavaScript, C, C++, and ASP
>> Applications: Visual InterDev, Visual SourceSafe,
>> Internet Explorer, Netscape Navigator/Communicator,
>> Opera, Word, Excel, PowerPoint, Photoshop, Paint Shop
>> Pro, HomeSite, Dreamweaver, WebPosition Gold,
>> RealPlayer/RealEncoder, Easy CD Creator, plus many
>> others
> I'd change the "plus" to "and".
Ok. The sample had "plus". I will trust the grammar people :).
>> WORK PropertyFirst.com, Alhambra, CA. Internet
>> EXPERIENCE (propertyfirst.com)
>>
>> * Product Assurance Specialist & Web Developer/Designer
> Don't use the "&"; use "and".
Alright.
>> (December 1998 - March 2001)
>>
>> + Developed, designed, debugged, and deployed Web pages
>> and graphics for the Web sites
> "... for Web sites". "The" is wrong here. If
> you mean "the company's website" then say that.
Well, the company had more than one Web sites. Obviously, we have the
company's Web site and hosted Web sites.
>> + Participated in the development and usability testing
>> of Web and software products
>> + Advised on innovative Web and software quality
>> assurance technologies to enhance Web sites
>> + Created and managed test cases and bug reports
>> + Involved with software configuration management
> Hmm. Out of context I was going to say that "involved with" is incorrect,
> but it doesn't really look too wrong to me here. I think there's a
> difference, which is that "Involved in software configuration
> management" sounds like you had a more active, responsible role, so for
> that reason alone you might want to use "in". I suppose "involved
> with" is slightly more colloquial, and some speakers might not use it at
> all. (Of course, the usual meaning of "involved with" is "in a romantic
> or sexual realtionship with".)
That is what someone else said about "involved with". Maybe that looks bad
on my resume! I will use "involved in".
>> + Provided technical support with other coworkers
>>
>> The Jungle II Online, Glendora, CA. Internet
>> (jungleii.com)
>>
>> * Coordinator (September 1994 - May 1998)
>>
>> + Maintained and coordinated files and file libraries
>> + Provided weekly issues of file reviews online
>> + Moderated chat sessions and message forums
>> + Assisted clients and system operators with online
>> technical support via chat, emails, and forums
> Get rid of "via". I'm not sure what the best substitute is. Maybe here
> you could just say "using chat, email, and forums". Note that
> "email" should be singular here.
Ok, I will go with that.
>> + Hosted its first Web site on the Internet
> Hosted company's first Web site on the Internet
Ok.
>
>> Azusa Pacific University, Azusa, CA. Internet (apu.edu)
>>
>> * University Marketing and Creative Media Intern
>> (September 1997 - April 1998)
>>
>> + Designed and managed Web pages for the university's
>> Web site
>> + Created Web graphics
>> + Data conversion and integration for Web site
>> databases
>>
>> * Residence Life Webmaster (January 1996 - April 1998)
>>
>> + Designed and maintained the Residence Life Web pages
> You're using definite articles ("the") a bit more often than is
> customarily done in resume-ese (even though you're correct as far as
> ordinary usage goes), which is a bit jarring to me, but it's not such a
> big deal. Here, for example, I'd expect
Yeah, I have a bad habbit of overusing "the".
> Designed and managed Residence Life Web pages
Ok.
>> + Answered email questions and made referrals for
>> further information
>>
>> * Computer Support Volunteer (January 1995 - April 1998)
>>
>> + Troubleshooted and advised faculty members and
>> students
> "Troubleshooted" is unquestionably correct -- though it does
> look a bit funny. I suspect, as with "tread water", it's not used much in
> the past tense form. Maybe you should avoid using it. How about:
> Handled troubleshooting; advised faculty members and students
> Or maybe "Responsible for troubleshooting".
I will use "Handled troubleshooting; advised faculty members and students"
since I want to keep my sentences consistent. Each sentence starts with
a verb.
>> + Reported problems and gave suggestions to the system
>> administrator
>>
>> Hacienda La Puente Unified School District, La Puente,
>> CA. Internet (hlpusd.k12.ca.us)
>>
>> * High School Web Designer (June - August 1996)
>>
>> + Designed La Puente High School's Web pages
>> + Designed Valley Alternative Schools' Web pages
>>
>> Youth Leadership Forum for Students with Disabilities,
>> Sacramento, CA
>>
>> * Layout Editor (May - June 1996)
>>
>> + Designed an issue of Youth Leadership Forum Alumni
>> Newsletter
>>
>> Chinese Outreach Christian Broadcasting, Alhambra, CA
>>
>> * Volunteer (April - August 1995)
>>
>> + Created computer mailing lists
>> + Entered data to the computers
> Can't say "entered data to". How about: "Entered data". ("Computers" is
> obvious.)
Ok. However, the cassette tapes was not related to computers.
>> + Duplicated cassette tapes for distribution
>>
>>
>> OTHER MAJOR * Youth Leadership Forum for Students with Disabilities,
>> EXPERIENCE Sacramento, CA
>> Delegate (August 1993)
>>
>> + Sponsored by the California Governor's Committee for
>> Employment of Disabled Persons
>> + Expanded awareness and an appreciation of physically
>> challenged individuals
> Get rid of the "an" there.
Ok.
> "Feedback".
Alright, thanks. I just needed some feedbacks on improving my resume.
My English is not strong as you can see. :)
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perchprism
<a...@accuser37.apu.edu> wrote in message
news:YgS%6.9922$ck5.1...@newsread2.prod.itd.earthlink.net...
> Please kindly proofread my resume for any spelling and grammar errors.
> Please note that it contains a lot of computer terms. I want to be sure
> that I didn't put any silly errors. I am not an English major [grin].
Everyone should be [frown].
> Note that I excluded putting my personal information for privacy. :)
>
> Someone pointed out that "with" in "Involved with software
> configuration management" should be "in". So it should say "Involved
> in software configuration management". Any opinions on this phrase?
Your someone is right about the idiom (you might be involved "with" your
boss's wife), but see below.
>
> [Personal Information Snipped]
>
>
> EDUCATION Azusa Pacific University, Azusa, CA
EDUCATION Azusa Pacific University, Azusa, California
> Bachelor of Science in Computer Science, May 1998
>
>
> COMPUTER * Experienced with excellent computer skills in many
> SKILLS software programs
COMPUTER * Expert in the use of many software packages
SKILLS
> * Over fifteen years of experiences with various
> computer platforms
* Over fifteen years of experience with various
computer platforms
> * Knowledge with Web design, graphic design, software
> quality assurance, debugging, security, and online
> technical support
* Knowledge of Web design, graphic design, software
quality assurance, debugging, security, and online
technical support
Do you write programs? You mention C and all below. Say so if you do.
>
>
> COMPUTER Platforms/Systems: PC (WINDOWS/DOS/LINUX/UNIX) and Mac
> EXPERIENCE Languages: HTML, CSS, JavaScript, C, C++, and ASP
> Applications: Visual InterDev, Visual SourceSafe,
> Internet Explorer, Netscape Navigator/Communicator,
> Opera, Word, Excel, PowerPoint, Photoshop, Paint Shop
> Pro, HomeSite, Dreamweaver, WebPosition Gold,
> RealPlayer/RealEncoder, Easy CD Creator, plus many
> others
>
>
> WORK PropertyFirst.com, Alhambra, CA. Internet
> WORK PropertyFirst.com, Alhambra, California. Internet
> EXPERIENCE (propertyfirst.com)
>
> * Product Assurance Specialist & Web Developer/Designer
> (December 1998 - March 2001)
>
> + Developed, designed, debugged, and deployed Web pages
> and graphics for the Web sites
> + Participated in the development and usability testing
> of Web and software products
> + Advised on innovative Web and software quality
> assurance technologies to enhance Web sites
> + Created and managed test cases and bug reports
> + Involved with software configuration management
+ Software configuration management
> + Provided technical support with other coworkers
>
> The Jungle II Online, Glendora, CA. Internet
The Jungle II Online, Glendora, California. Internet
> (jungleii.com)
>
> * Coordinator (September 1994 - May 1998)
>
> + Maintained and coordinated files and file libraries
> + Provided weekly issues of file reviews online
> + Moderated chat sessions and message forums
> + Assisted clients and system operators with online
> technical support via chat, emails, and forums
> + Hosted its first Web site on the Internet
>
> Azusa Pacific University, Azusa, CA. Internet (apu.edu)
Azusa Pacific University, Azusa, California. Internet
(apu.edu)
> * University Marketing and Creative Media Intern
> (September 1997 - April 1998)
>
> + Designed and managed Web pages for the university's
> Web site
> + Created Web graphics
> + Data conversion and integration for Web site
> databases
>
> * Residence Life Webmaster (January 1996 - April 1998)
>
> + Designed and maintained the Residence Life Web pages
> + Answered email questions and made referrals for
> further information
>
> * Computer Support Volunteer (January 1995 - April 1998)
>
> + Troubleshooted and advised faculty members and
> students
> + Reported problems and gave suggestions to the system
> administrator
>
> Hacienda La Puente Unified School District, La Puente,
> CA. Internet (hlpusd.k12.ca.us)
Hacienda La Puente Unified School District, La Puente,
California. Internet (hlpusd.k12.ca.us)
>
> * High School Web Designer (June - August 1996)
>
> + Designed La Puente High School's Web pages
> + Designed Valley Alternative Schools' Web pages
>
> Youth Leadership Forum for Students with Disabilities,
> Sacramento, CA
California
> * Layout Editor (May - June 1996)
>
> + Designed an issue of Youth Leadership Forum Alumni
> Newsletter
>
> Chinese Outreach Christian Broadcasting, Alhambra, CA
>
> * Volunteer (April - August 1995)
>
> + Created computer mailing lists
> + Entered data to the computers
+ Data entry
+ Duplicated cassette tapes for distribution
>
> OTHER MAJOR * Youth Leadership Forum for Students with Disabilities,
> EXPERIENCE Sacramento, CA
> Delegate (August 1993)
>
> + Sponsored by the California Governor's Committee for
> Employment of Disabled Persons
> + Expanded awareness and an appreciation of physically
> challenged individuals
+ Expanded awareness of and appreciation for physically
challenged individuals
>
> HONORS AND * Recognition Award, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
> AWARDS (August 2000)
> * Recognition Award, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
> (June 2000)
> * Recognition Awards, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
award
> (April 2000)
> * Second Century Fund Scholarship Award, Alexander Graham
> Bell Association for the Deaf. Washington, D.C., 1994
> * Participation Award, Youth Leadership Forum for
> Students with Disabilities. The California Governor's
> Committee for Employment of Disabled Persons.
> Sacramento, CA (August 1993)
> * Special Award, Marked Progress in Academic Work and
> Citizenship. Mesa Robles Junior High School. Hacienda
> Heights, CA, 1990
> * Second Place Award. Painting, oil or acrylic. 9th
> Annual Puente Hills Art Festival, sponsored by Diamond
> Bar Artist Guild. Diamond Bar, CA, 1990
> * First Place Award, Painting, oil or acrylic. Junior
> Fair, Los Angeles County Fair, Pomona, CA, 1987
> * Blue Ribbon Award, Painting, water color. Junior Fair,
> Los Angeles County Fair, Pomona, CA, 1987
"California" every time.
> REFERENCES * Available upon request
>
>
>
> Thank you in advance for any feedbacks! :)
feedback
> --
> If you are replying to Ant's news post by e-mail, then please kindly
> remove ANT in the e-mail addresses listed below. Note the CaSe!
Calcium selenite? I don't see it.
Perchprism
a...@accuser37.apu.edu
state instead of abbreviation? If I type "California", then my resume
will be three pages. I am trying to avoid it. I added replies to your
changes. They are inlined in the quoted sections.
> + Software configuration management
> California
> award
Even if I got two awards in one month?
>> (April 2000)
>> * Second Century Fund Scholarship Award, Alexander Graham
>> Bell Association for the Deaf. Washington, D.C., 1994
>> * Participation Award, Youth Leadership Forum for
>> Students with Disabilities. The California Governor's
>> Committee for Employment of Disabled Persons.
>> Sacramento, CA (August 1993)
>> * Special Award, Marked Progress in Academic Work and
>> Citizenship. Mesa Robles Junior High School. Hacienda
>> Heights, CA, 1990
>> * Second Place Award. Painting, oil or acrylic. 9th
>> Annual Puente Hills Art Festival, sponsored by Diamond
>> Bar Artist Guild. Diamond Bar, CA, 1990
>> * First Place Award, Painting, oil or acrylic. Junior
>> Fair, Los Angeles County Fair, Pomona, CA, 1987
>> * Blue Ribbon Award, Painting, water color. Junior Fair,
>> Los Angeles County Fair, Pomona, CA, 1987
> "California" every time.
>> REFERENCES * Available upon request
>>
>>
>>
>> Thank you in advance for any feedbacks! :)
> feedback
Whoops!
>> --
>> If you are replying to Ant's news post by e-mail, then please kindly
>> remove ANT in the e-mail addresses listed below. Note the CaSe!
> Calcium selenite? I don't see it.
> Perchprism
Huh? I didn't get this part. I assume it was a joke.
--
"I like ants, in chocolate. Crunch, hummmm." --unknown
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If you are replying to Ant's news post by e-mail, then please kindly
remove ANT in the e-mail addresses listed below. Note the CaSe!
Franke
a...@accuser37.apu.edu wrote:
> Thank you for your feedback. Does it really matter if I type the whole
> state instead of abbreviation? If I type "California", then my resume
> will be three pages. I am trying to avoid it.
You do not have to type out any state name if you are giving
an address; the two-letter state code will do, eg CA, but you
must be consistent in your usage. You must type it out if you
use it in a sentence, though, and if there is any reason to believe
that your reader might confuse the abbreviation for California
with the two-letter country code for Canada: both are CA.
[snipt]
a...@accuser37.apu.edu
> a...@accuser37.apu.edu wrote:
Thanks, Franke. I have "CA" in the address header of my resume. My
cover letter has CA as well.
perchprism
> Thank you for your feedback. Does it really matter if I type the whole
> state instead of abbreviation? If I type "California", then my resume
> will be three pages. I am trying to avoid it. I added replies to your
> changes. They are inlined in the quoted sections.
I'm just trying in my small way to stamp out the use of postal
abbreviations. They are ugly and belong only on the front of envelopes to
make the lives of sorting droids easier so they won't go on killing sprees
so often, maybe. Furthermore, formality requires the full state name in my
book, but if you must use the abbreviation, go with "Calif." The AP
Stylebook, for one, doesn't even mention postal abbreviations under "state
names," but it does list the standard abbreviations as I learned them as a
lad.
<snip>
Dear Mr. Ant--please trim your replies as I have done. The way I understand
it, some folks out there pay to download by the word as it were.
> >> HONORS AND * Recognition Award, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
> >> AWARDS (August 2000)
> >> * Recognition Award, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
> >> (June 2000)
> >> * Recognition Awards, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
>
> > award
>
> Even if I got two awards in one month?
The mere "s" is insufficient to convey that.
<snip>
> > Calcium selenite? I don't see it.
>
> Huh? I didn't get this part. I assume it was a joke.
A teensy one. What is CaSe?
--
Perchprism
(southern New Jersey, near Philadelphia)
Murray Arnow
>ant wrote:
><a...@accuser37.apu.edu> wrote in message
>news:Zv507.11275$ck5.1...@newsread2.prod.itd.earthlink.net...
>> Thank you for your feedback. Does it really matter if I type the whole
>> state instead of abbreviation? If I type "California", then my resume
>> will be three pages. I am trying to avoid it. I added replies to your
>> changes. They are inlined in the quoted sections.
>
>I'm just trying in my small way to stamp out the use of postal
>abbreviations. They are ugly and belong only on the front of envelopes to
>make the lives of sorting droids easier so they won't go on killing sprees
>so often, maybe. Furthermore, formality requires the full state name in my
>book, but if you must use the abbreviation, go with "Calif." The AP
>Stylebook, for one, doesn't even mention postal abbreviations under "state
>names," but it does list the standard abbreviations as I learned them as a
>lad.
>
This is the first poor advice I've seen here--how're ya do'n Perch?
There is nothing wrong with the "CA" abbreviation when used in the
context stated; it is as improper as using "lb" to mean pound. What's
more, "Calif." is a bit old-fashioned and will likely look odd to the
person targeted.
I don't know what is meant by formality. Resumes use a style quite
distinct from other forms of writing. In a resume extreme brevity,
without loss of clarity, is treated as an art form. This makes "CA"
preferable to "Calif."
a...@accuser37.apu.edu
> abbreviations. They are ugly and belong only on the front of envelopes to
> make the lives of sorting droids easier so they won't go on killing sprees
> so often, maybe. Furthermore, formality requires the full state name in my
> book, but if you must use the abbreviation, go with "Calif." The AP
> Stylebook, for one, doesn't even mention postal abbreviations under "state
> names," but it does list the standard abbreviations as I learned them as a
> lad.
Ah ok.
> Dear Mr. Ant--please trim your replies as I have done. The way I understand
> it, some folks out there pay to download by the word as it were.
Sorry.
>> >> HONORS AND * Recognition Award, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
>> >> AWARDS (August 2000)
>> >> * Recognition Award, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
>> >> (June 2000)
>> >> * Recognition Awards, PropertyFirst.com. Alhambra, CA
>>
>> > award
>>
>> Even if I got two awards in one month?
> The mere "s" is insufficient to convey that.
Ok.
>> > Calcium selenite? I don't see it.
>>
>> Huh? I didn't get this part. I assume it was a joke.
> A teensy one. What is CaSe?
Oh, I was trying point out to computer newbies the ANT part in my e-mail
addresses when replying to me by e-mail.
Richard Fontana
> ant wrote:
> <a...@accuser37.apu.edu> wrote in message
> news:Zv507.11275$ck5.1...@newsread2.prod.itd.earthlink.net...
> > Thank you for your feedback. Does it really matter if I type the whole
> > state instead of abbreviation? If I type "California", then my resume
> > will be three pages. I am trying to avoid it. I added replies to your
> > changes. They are inlined in the quoted sections.
>
> I'm just trying in my small way to stamp out the use of postal
> abbreviations. They are ugly and belong only on the front of envelopes to
> make the lives of sorting droids easier so they won't go on killing sprees
> so often, maybe. Furthermore, formality requires the full state name in my
> book, but if you must use the abbreviation, go with "Calif." The AP
> Stylebook, for one, doesn't even mention postal abbreviations under "state
> names," but it does list the standard abbreviations as I learned them as a
> lad.
I used to feel this way too. Sometime during the early 1990s I gave
up; now I generally use the two-letter postal abbreviations.
R J Valentine
} On Tue, 3 Jul 2001, perchprism wrote:
}> I'm just trying in my small way to stamp out the use of postal
}> abbreviations.
...
} I used to feel this way too.
...
When I was in the Army in Japan, I had a sib who felt that way about ZIP
Codes, excepting APO San Francisco was the biggest little city in the
world, and most of the mail took a month-long detour by way of the
Pentagon.
They're still optional on first class mail, I think.
--
R. J. Valentine <mailto:r...@smart.net>
20725
(or 20726, for that matter)
Aaron Davies
> On Tue, 3 Jul 2001 16:30:02 -0400 Richard Fontana
> <rf...@sparky.cs.nyu.edu> wrote:
>
> } On Tue, 3 Jul 2001, perchprism wrote:
>
> }> I'm just trying in my small way to stamp out the use of postal
> }> abbreviations.
> ...
> } I used to feel this way too.
> ...
>
> When I was in the Army in Japan, I had a sib who felt that way about ZIP
> Codes, excepting APO San Francisco was the biggest little city in the
> world, and most of the mail took a month-long detour by way of the
> Pentagon.
>
> They're still optional on first class mail, I think.
OTOH, for some people it's all that's needed, given the full nine
digits. I haven't tested it with an actual letter, but "10027-8313"
resolves directly to my campus mailbox when I look it up on the USPS
website.
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Richard Fontana
> R. J. Valentine <mailto:r...@smart.net>
> 20725
> (or 20726, for that matter)
Geez, you must be near Route 1. I'll bet that's scary.
R J Valentine
} On Wed, 4 Jul 2001, R J Valentine wrote:
}
}> R. J. Valentine <mailto:r...@smart.net>
}> 20725
}> (or 20726, for that matter)
}
} Geez, you must be near Route 1.
Yup. Isn't everyone?
} I'll bet that's scary.
Not especially. Nowadays the road runs along the west side of the tracks,
and there is a stretch between Laurel and Beltsville where's there's no
sidewalk and not much shoulder, so you pretty much walk the white
line. Most drivers are right considerate about moving over a lane, but
every once in a while there's be a truck driver who wants to swat you with
the mirror. The thing about trucks is that they run at a fairly
predictable rate, so you can turn sideways just when they've committed
themselves, and the joke's on them.
Route 1 was dramatically underwater when Hurricane Agnes passed our way in
June of seventy-two and the mighty Patuxent overran Rocky Gorge Dam,
taking with it the Ninth Street Bridge and the Race Track Bridge, though
the Seventh Street Bridge and the Route 1 bridges (at Second Street and
what would be Third Street if it weren't Washington Boulevard) survived,
as did the railroad bridge (the border between Howard County and Anne
Arundel County (the latter named after the wife of one of the Lords
Baltimore, and the county Annapolis is in) follows the tracks), though
they were all under water. I got across the Seventh Street Bridge (the
last one open) just as the water started across. That was an adventure,
but not exactly scary, though I did have to cross Route 1 twice to get
home from work that day, when normally I didn't have to at all.
But the road (along which the "What hath God wrought?" telegram was
transmitted), _used_ to cross the tracks at the phantom place called
Contee and run down the east side for a while, with a sand and gravel pit
(which I hear was at least once the dominant industry of Prince George's
County) between the road and the tracks. I drove down the old road once
about twenty years ago, and there was a spot where the sand pit had
started nibbling away at the road. _That_ was scary. Mine may have been
the last car through there.
The late great Jean Shepherd did a PBS special called "Route One", which
may have been the pilot to the series called _Jean Shepherd's
America_. I'd snap up either one if I found them on video.
Yup, Route 1. Starts at the old Pan American headquarters in Key West.
--
R H Draney
news:1evzw2t.1upmulj1y8mve1N%aa...@avalon.pascal-central.com...
>
> OTOH, for some people it's all that's needed, given the full nine
> digits. I haven't tested it with an actual letter, but "10027-8313"
> resolves directly to my campus mailbox when I look it up on the USPS
> website.
The USPS has some funny "rules" about addressing mail...violating them isn't
actually a crime, but there's a strong hint that they can slow things
down...ideally, you should address a letter in all caps with no punctuation,
and use both the two-letter state abbreviation *and* the full 9-digit ZIP
code (the hyphen is the only punctuation mark that they *prefer*)....
My ZIP+4 resolves to a total of thirteen street addresses, which is odd,
since there are 24 in the single "cluster" box (with a single lock on the
back for delivery to the entire range) that my mail is delivered to...in
other places, ZIP+4 is enough to identify a single address, but the
arrangement here explains why the IRS appends three *further* digits when
they send out the tax forms....
(In spite of all this apparent precision, I still occasionally get junk mail
addressed to "Jacqueline LittleJohn", of whose existence I have never seen
non-postal evidence)....r
Joe Manfre
> Richard Fontana (rf...@sparky.cs.nyu.edu) wrote:
> } Geez, you must be near Route 1.
>
> Yup. Isn't everyone?
Everyone who matters.
> } I'll bet that's scary.
>
> Not especially. Nowadays the road runs along the west side of the
> tracks, and there is a stretch between Laurel and Beltsville where's
> there's no sidewalk and not much shoulder, so you pretty much walk
> the white line.
Have you walked that entire stretch?
Wow. I always find that whole Muirkirk area (which is what I call
everything between Laurel and Beltsville, partly due to the influence
of the commuter-train station there) to be kinda creepy, especially
around the big sand-and-gravel elevators or whatever they are. But I
tend to stay inside the Beltway anyway, not for any snooty reason but
because it starts to feel a little bit too rural when I get outside,
particularly in P.G. County.
ObAUE: How about that "it starts to feel a little bit too rural"
construction? A little like "it's raining"?
JM
p.s. Is that used-car lot called "Y2K Auto Sales" still there?
--
Joe Manfre, Hyattsville, Maryland.
Skitt
"Joe Manfre" <man...@flash.net> wrote in message
news:9i0dvs$gh7lo$1...@ID-81441.news.dfncis.de...
> R J Valentine (r...@smart.net) wrote:
>
> > Richard Fontana (rf...@sparky.cs.nyu.edu) wrote:
>
> > } Geez, you must be near Route 1.
> >
> > Yup. Isn't everyone?
>
> Everyone who matters.
Darn! I lived between Route 1 and A1A near Cocoa, FL, but moved away.
--
Skitt (in SF Bay Area) http://www.geocities.com/opus731/
I speak English well -- I learn it from a book!
-- Manuel of "Fawlty Towers" (he's from Barcelona).