Re: Please read ...
George Dance
> On Jan 11, 5:17 pm, "=z=" <shull...@gmail.com> wrote:
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> > On Jan 11, 10:40 am, -hi- <hieronymous...@gmail.com> wrote:
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> > > Please read with just one task in mind. The task I ask: One, of a
> > > kind you'd find my kind would be resigned
> > > to ask up front - Leave naught behind. Let thoughts make your mind
> > > unbind. With grace and tact supporting skill, this space in fact,
> > > provides what will be seen on screen to fit the bill as writing,
> > > right? I'm writing, still. Bade me well, and wish me luck, but can
> > > you tell, well worth the buck I'd charge at large were this a
> > > transaction? I mean what you've seen, does it bring satisfaction?
> > > Can you say that a buck would be money well tendered, if my verse cost
> > > a dollar, and this your rhyme rendered? Would you spend more than
> > > time (like ten dimes) on this matter? Would your wallet be thinned,
> > > or would mine get much fatter? The norm of the former suggests it
> > > would not. The latter, re: “fatter”, a sonant 'bon mot’ suggesting
> > > ingesting. My calling is clear, and rings in your ear as you read
> > > without fear. To be more specific, in terms more prolific than they
> > > are on topic, think "Hawaiian Tropic", and me in a chair writing this
> > > over there.
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> > > -hi-
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> > why do you not seperate?...it makes a hard read the way you do...but i
> > enjoy the words...anyway...-hi-
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> I suppose I have my reasons, but I'm probably just trying to be
> difficult.
> Thanks for reading.
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> -hi-
I understand you've got your reasons: and the prose formatting does
look like an essential part of the "Prosetry" concept. You already
know I'd prefer a more traditional line-broken poem (though I'd break
the lines differently than z), so I'll waste no more time on that.
One thing that may be new to you is that others are doing the same
thing. For example, in the spring I looked up Leonard Cohen's "There
is a War" in his /Stranger Music/ anthology, and found that he'd
formatted it like so:
There is a War
There is a war between the rich and poor, a war between the man and
the woman. There is a war between the ones who say, "There is a war"
and the ones who say "there isn't." /Why don't you come on back to the
war? It's just beginning./
I live here with a woman and a child. The situation makes me kind of
nervous. I rise up from her arms, she says, "I guess you call this
love. I call it Room Service." /Why don't you come on back to the war?
Don't be a tourist. Why don't you come on back to the war? Let's all
get nervous./
[etc.]
Leonard Cohen, Stranger Music (McClelland & Stewart, 1993), 202.
For some reason, all the sites that have posted TiaW online, with or
without permission, have ignored that and posted it with conventional
verse line-breaks.
(I've copied this to a.m.l-c, where I copy all my posts that mention
Mr. Cohen. If you don't want to appear there, please snip the
crosspost and let me know.)
Will Dockery
Very interesting way Cohen did that.
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i agree...i only quickly broke them up for impact of reason...