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Bret Cahill
May 10, 2013, 11:11:22 AM5/10/13
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> Did the Obama administration's politically expedient story cost American
> lives?
>
> The Benghazi story until now has been a jumble of factoids that didn't
> quite cohere, didn't produce a story that people could absorb and hold
> in their minds. This week that changed. Three State Department officials
> testifying under oath to a House committee changed it, by adding
> information that gave form to a growing picture.
If there was any information that changed anything it would have
appeared in the first sentence.
IOW, the writer has absolutely nothing.to say.
Bret Cahill
"Omit needless words."
-- Strunk & White _The Elements of Style_
> lives?
>
> The Benghazi story until now has been a jumble of factoids that didn't
> quite cohere, didn't produce a story that people could absorb and hold
> in their minds. This week that changed. Three State Department officials
> testifying under oath to a House committee changed it, by adding
> information that gave form to a growing picture.
If there was any information that changed anything it would have
appeared in the first sentence.
IOW, the writer has absolutely nothing.to say.
Bret Cahill
"Omit needless words."
-- Strunk & White _The Elements of Style_
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