It's Been Over A Year : )
mat1t3
Losing sight of what made you
The brightest part of my life
Turned out to be a complication involving
Our eye doctor: He gave me the wrong prescription glasses.
Anyway, to know all is ok
And that your love still lights the way
Brings a warmth to my heart like
The coming of a new day.
It also makes me wonder if the
Batteries in our emergency flashlight have started
Leaking battery acid yet.
It's been over a year since I've checked.
Will Dockery
Dynamite poem, Matt... makes me wonder how a couple of my favorite
chicks are doing, myself. Think I'll go out strolling tonight to Old
SoHo.
--
"God's Toybox" by Will Dockery & The Shadowville All-Stars:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EabjmMP9mQk
mat1t3
thanks for reading and commenting.
: )
ggamble
On 3-Aug-2010, Will Dockery <will.d...@gmail.com> wrote:
> me my
> myself. I
Nice example of a typical dinkery critique attempt.
mat1t3
> On 3-Aug-2010, Will Dockery <will.dock...@gmail.com> wrote:
>
> > me my
> > myself. I
>
> Nice example of a typical dinkery critique attempt.
Gary, are you here to post poetry or just bust balls?
I guess that's a stupid question considering you do
very little of the former and excel in the latter.
Everybody knows your obsession with Dockery.
The cat's out of the bag. However, why don't you
try putting your loving feelings to poetry?
Tell us how much Dockery means to you in
a poem. After all, this is a poetry workshop
by your own admission. Do ya think that poetry
should probably be included at some point?
: )
Will Dockery
Will Dockery
> On Aug 3, 8:50 am, "ggamble" <ggasfly @lying.burnout.net> wrote:
>> On 3-Aug-2010, Will Dockery wrote:
>
> > > me my
> > > myself. I
>
> > Nice example of a typical dinkery critique attempt.
>
> Gary, are you here to post poetry or just bust balls?
>
> I guess that's a stupid question considering you do
> very little of the former and excel in the latter.
>
> Everybody knows your obsession with Dockery.
> The cat's out of the bag. However, why don't you
> try putting your loving feelings to poetry?
> Tell us how much Dockery means to you in
> a poem. After all, this is a poetry workshop
> by your own admission. Do ya think that poetry
> should probably be included at some point?
>
> : )
Gary sure is slobbering behind my every post this morning, true that.
But Gary Gamble writing a new poem?
That seems impossible at this time... heh.
mat1t3
> On Aug 3, 12:02 pm, mat1t3 <amirrorcan...@cox.net> wrote:
>
>
>
>
>
> > On Aug 3, 8:50 am, "ggamble" <ggasfly @lying.burnout.net> wrote:
> >> On 3-Aug-2010, Will Dockery wrote:
>
> > > > me my
> > > > myself. I
>
> > > Nice example of a typical dinkery critique attempt.
>
> > Gary, are you here to post poetry or just bust balls?
>
> > I guess that's a stupid question considering you do
> > very little of the former and excel in the latter.
>
> > Everybody knows your obsession with Dockery.
> > The cat's out of the bag. However, why don't you
> > try putting your loving feelings to poetry?
> > Tell us how much Dockery means to you in
> > a poem. After all, this is a poetry workshop
> > by your own admission. Do ya think that poetry
> > should probably be included at some point?
>
> > : )
>
> Gary sure is slobbering behind my every post this morning, true that.
> But Gary Gamble writing a new poem?
>
> That seems impossible at this time... heh.
>
Yet, it just so happens that this is a "poetry workshop"
by his own admission. So, what kind of person comes
to a laundry mat with a radio that needs service?
The same type of person that comes to a poetry
workshop with no poetry and a bunch of hot crap.
I think Pete The Dog is still wandering around writers
block lost and confused. And, all the whistling in
the world doesn't seem to attract his attention.
Come to think of it, I think he's deaf, dumb and blind.
Or, it could just mean he needs a good pet psychiatrist.
: )
Will Dockery
I doubt the lying burnout even knows what he's trying to accomplish
any more.
--
Will Dockery & Friends at Hogbottom 2010:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EBpnUOepRZg
nerissa
I like how your poem conveys a subtle doubt about the quality and stability
of a meaningful relationship. The images you used are quite inventive.
As for a detailed critique, some others here are more qualified.
nerissa
Will Dockery
> mat1t3 wrote:
>
> I'm glad to know that
> > Losing sight of what made you
> > The brightest part of my life
> > Turned out to be a complication involving
> > Our eye doctor: He gave me the wrong prescription glasses.
>
> > Anyway, to know all is ok
> > And that your love still lights the way
> > Brings a warmth to my heart like
> > The coming of a new day.
> > It also makes me wonder if the
> > Batteries in our emergency flashlight have started
> > Leaking battery acid yet.
>
> > It's been over a year since I've checked.
>
> I like how your poem conveys a subtle doubt about the quality and stability
> of a meaningful relationship. The images you used are quite inventive.
Exactly what I found so pleasing about it, and something I found
relating to real life circumstances of my own, as well.
> As for a detailed critique, some others here are more qualified.
Likewise from here.
> nerissa
--
"Shadowville Speedway" CD on Artemis Records:
http://www.artemisrecords.net/dockeryconley.html
ggamble
On 4-Aug-2010, "nerissa" <ner...@fantasy.net> wrote:
> As for a detailed critique, some others here are more qualified.
Name names.
mat1t3
Thanks for reading and commenting.
You actually hit it right on the spot:
A satirical piece where two of the most
overused cliches in literary history are
used to mock superficial love. Consequently,
it's a parody on amateur poets and
lyricists as well.
That was my intention. And, since I'm
quite the amateur myself, it shouldn't
have been too hard to convey.
: )
mat1t3
> On 4-Aug-2010, "nerissa" <neri...@fantasy.net> wrote:
>
> > As for a detailed critique, some others here are more qualified.
>
> Name names.
I'll name the ones you consider "qualified."
Rogers
Houstman &
Ross.
I forgot...isn't that a legal firm as well?
: )
Will Dockery
> On Aug 4, 3:11 pm, "ggamble" <ggasfly @bitter.burnout.net> wrote:
>> On 4-Aug-2010, "nerissa" <neri...@fantasy.net> wrote:
>
> > > As for a detailed critique, some others here are more qualified.
>
> > Name names.
>
> I'll name the ones you consider "qualified."
>
> Rogers
I miss Karla Rogers, wish she'd come back...
> Houstman &
> Ross.
>
> I forgot...isn't that a legal firm as well?
>
> : )
--
WILL DOCKERY & Shadowville All-Stars - God´s Toybox - A movie by
Falke58
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EabjmMP9mQk
ggamble
On 4-Aug-2010, Will Dockery <will.d...@gmail.com> wrote:
> I miss Karla Rogers, wish she'd come back...
What, do you miss using your old *confused, as usual* epithet on her?
If you left, she'd probably come back.
mat1t3
> On Aug 4, 7:54 pm, mat1t3 <amirrorcan...@cox.net> wrote:
>
> > On Aug 4, 3:11 pm, "ggamble" <ggasfly @bitter.burnout.net> wrote:
> >> On 4-Aug-2010, "nerissa" <neri...@fantasy.net> wrote:
>
> > > > As for a detailed critique, some others here are more qualified.
>
> > > Name names.
>
> > I'll name the ones you consider "qualified."
>
> > Rogers
>
> I miss Karla Rogers, wish she'd come back...
>
Really? Even though all she did was nag at you?
And, haven't you called her a liar to her face on more
than one occasion?
When will you ever get enough abuse, Will?
Will Dockery
> On 4-Aug-2010, Will Dockery wrote:
>
> > I miss Karla Rogers, wish she'd come back...
>
> What, do you miss using your old *confused, as usual* epithet on her?
Yes, Karla was often and easily confused, but I did enjoy her poems
from time-to-time.
nerissa
For that I'm not venturesome enough.
nerissa
Will Dockery
Being in love is like one cliche after another, but it sure feels
good.
"Friends are over-rated..."
George Dance
> On Aug 4, 10:52 pm, "ggamble" <g...@youbet.net> wrote:
>
> > On 4-Aug-2010, Will Dockery wrote:
>
> > > I miss Karla Rogers, wish she'd come back...
>
> > What, do you miss using your old *confused, as usual* epithet on her?
>
> Yes, Karla was often and easily confused, but I did enjoy her poems
> from time-to-time.
While Karla posted quite a bit of poetry here in the past year-and-a-
half, not that much of it was new. Most of it was revised or simply
recycled from her 20th century ouevre. And no one needs Karla here to
avoid missing that; all one needs is Google, to go back and search the
RAP and AAPC archives.
the messenjah
> On 3-Aug-2010, Will Dockery <will.dock...@gmail.com> wrote:
>
> > me my
> > myself. I
>
> Nice example of a typical dinkery critique attempt.
Poor little Gary. Still whining.
ggamble
On 7-Aug-2010, the messenjah <theguyo...@veryfast.biz> wrote:
> Still whining.
Poor little chuckles.
Still ALONE.
You're going to die alone and destitute.
That must be hard to deal with.
Will Dockery
wrote:
Desperately so.
You'll have Little Gary crawling back in no time, though, Chuck...
you're his favorite sniff.
--
Will Dockery music & poetry:
http://www.myspace.com/willdockery
ggamble
Will Dockery
> On 7-Aug-2010, the messenjah <theguyontheb...@veryfast.biz> wrote:
>
> > Still whining.
>
> Poor little chuckles.
>
> Still ALONE.
>
> You're going to die alone and destitute.
>
> That must be hard to deal with.
Your decades-long obsession with Chuck is noted, Gary.
Will Dockery
"We know." -Dennis M. Hammes
George Dance
There is still no text of yours appearing on your messages, so it's
hard to tell what your point is. Are these words with which you have
some trouble?
ggamble
Will Dockery
> On Aug 8, 2:19 pm, "ggamble" <ggasfly @bitter.burnout.liar.net> wrote:
>
> > >lying burnout
> > >favorite sniff.
>
> There is still no text of yours appearing on your messages, so it's
> hard to tell what your point is. Are these words with which you have
> some trouble?
How often does Gary really have a point?