TDE!

[thedailyepiphany]

etched in pussy like stone
the mask of love reveals
inside the inner most
backspaces corners
left aside the uttermost
languid thoughts of
fluidity, pulsing
lesbian vibrations
winged tipped supermen
bones curving through
spine, deep, sucking
closing in collapsing flesh design
I know those breast
like the Nubian feelers
in nippolation
a suckling child
a fucking Man
a dying dream
she walks alone

http://rodgerpegues.wordpress.com/

[hello goodbye nevermind]

"thedailyepiphany" <rodger...@gmail.com> wrote in message
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pussy
lesbian
suckling child
and fucking

anything else?
or, do i have to left click the link for the rest?

[thedailyepiphany]

On Jan 2, 1:29 am, "hello goodbye nevermind"
<inoneearandoutyermot...@home.com> wrote:
> "thedailyepiphany" <rodgerpeg...@gmail.com> wrote in message

that's it........that's all......
but here's more work:

http://rodgerpegues.wordpress.com/2010/01/04/america/

[Peter J Ross]

In alt.arts.poetry.comments on Sat, 2 Jan 2010 00:50:18 -0800 (PST),
thedailyepiphany <rodger...@gmail.com> wrote:

> etched in pussy like stone

Etching is a technique applied to metal, not stone.

However, "etched in stone" is a common phrase - not merely a cliché,
but an *ignorant* cliché!

If you think it's very grown up to write "pussy" in a "poem", you're
either about seven or have spent most of your life in a convent.

> the mask of love reveals

Why is a mask etched in pussy?

You don't have complete control over your syntax, and therefore your
choice to use no punctuation marks is foolish.

<...>

> languid thoughts of
> fluidity, pulsing
> lesbian vibrations

Most of your "poem" is dull, but this bit is hilarious. Even stupid
people are likely to find it quite funny, so please change it, for
your own sake, even if you leave the rest as it is.

Languid thoughts of fluidity! *snort*
Pulsing lesbian vibrations! *giggle*

<..>

Above all, try to have your writing make sense.

> http://rodgerpegues.wordpress.com/

"America" is less ridiculous than "No".

she talks
like phone sex

Oh look, a simile that isn't laughable!

--
PJR :-)

<http://pjr.lasnobberia.net/verse/>

[Peter J Ross]

In alt.arts.poetry.comments on Sat, 2 Jan 2010 00:50:18 -0800 (PST),
thedailyepiphany <rodger...@gmail.com> wrote:

<...>

I think this might have been your first post, in which case there were
two things I ought to have said:

1. Welcome to AAPC!

2. We have a set of Frequently Asked Questions and other resources for
poets available here: http://www.aapcsite.plus.com/

(Thanks to Jim Sheard. Buy his book(s)!)