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M.B.

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Oct 31, 2002, 11:29:11 AM10/31/02
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He sleeps like a pup fat
on chow. Eyes closed
into wooly worms.
White, fine hairs float
on his cheek, shine
from the slant light handed
through the window, a gift from
the afternoon that spreads
across his salmon lips.
He wears peace
like a tarp over art yet viewed.


--
Peace,
\/|agical
\/|ark
,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
~~~~~~~~
'The question is,' said Alice, 'whether you can make words mean so many
different things.'
'The question is,' said Humpty Dumpty, 'which is to be master - that's all.'

-- Lewis Carrol --


Tom Bishop

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Oct 31, 2002, 11:58:41 AM10/31/02
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"M.B." <bril...@hotmail.com> wrote in message news:3rCdnYGt_un...@giganews.com...

I'll skip my normal baby recipes, since this is
leaning much too nicely for that.

Bet he's cute, and this is nice.

He will enjoy it when you show him, eh?


--
Tom Bishop -- http://Poetry.Here.Nu
"Drink more de-cafe!"
- an anonymous friend


M.B.

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Oct 31, 2002, 12:38:29 PM10/31/02
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"JAS Carter" <jsgo...@yahoo.com> wrote in message
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> On Thu, 31 Oct 2002 11:29:11 -0500, in alt.arts.poetry.comments "M.B."
> <bril...@hotmail.com> view hallooed:

>
> >He sleeps like a pup fat
>
> That's just an awful linebreak, MB.

At least, I'm consistant. I'll work on.

>
> >on chow. Eyes closed
> >into wooly worms.
> >White, fine hairs float
> >on his cheek, shine
> >from the slant light handed
> >through the window, a gift from
> >the afternoon that spreads
> >across his salmon lips.
>

> Unsure about salmon lips. Got me thinking of Tim Salmon, which is odd
> but forgivable in a baseball fan, I hope.


>
> >He wears peace
> >like a tarp over art yet viewed.
>

> Over art not yet viewed? Yet to be viewed?
>
> Interesting portrait. Sorry: "still life."

Thanks. Do you think _Portrait of Napping Child_ would be a better title?

Peace
Mark

> --
> Julie Carter
>
> "Actually, I very well adjusted."--An Idiot Who Shall Remain Nameless


JAS Carter

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Oct 31, 2002, 12:14:09 PM10/31/02
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On Thu, 31 Oct 2002 11:29:11 -0500, in alt.arts.poetry.comments "M.B."
<bril...@hotmail.com> view hallooed:

>He sleeps like a pup fat

That's just an awful linebreak, MB.

>on chow. Eyes closed


>into wooly worms.
>White, fine hairs float
>on his cheek, shine
>from the slant light handed
>through the window, a gift from
>the afternoon that spreads
>across his salmon lips.

Unsure about salmon lips. Got me thinking of Tim Salmon, which is odd


but forgivable in a baseball fan, I hope.

>He wears peace


>like a tarp over art yet viewed.

Over art not yet viewed? Yet to be viewed?

Interesting portrait. Sorry: "still life."

M.B.

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Oct 31, 2002, 12:47:03 PM10/31/02
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"Tom Bishop" <tom-...@truly.nu> wrote in message
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Well, doubt I'll ever see him again. Just a napping toddler on a bus I
found interesting because he could sleep so peaceful during all the
jostling.

Peace
Mark

JAS Carter

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Oct 31, 2002, 12:39:54 PM10/31/02
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On Thu, 31 Oct 2002 12:38:29 -0500, in alt.arts.poetry.comments "M.B."
<bril...@hotmail.com> view hallooed:

>> Interesting portrait. Sorry: "still life."


>
>Thanks. Do you think _Portrait of Napping Child_ would be a better title?

1. I'm terrible at titles, so ignore my advice.
2. I prefer "still life."

Ha!

Paul Heslop

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Oct 31, 2002, 3:58:37 PM10/31/02
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JAS Carter wrote:
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> On Thu, 31 Oct 2002 11:29:11 -0500, in alt.arts.poetry.comments "M.B."
> <bril...@hotmail.com> view hallooed:
>
> >He sleeps like a pup fat
>
> That's just an awful linebreak, MB.
>
I agree, I thought it was miss typed puppy fat

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Tom Bishop

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Oct 31, 2002, 4:17:10 PM10/31/02
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"M.B." <bril...@hotmail.com> wrote in message news:GfKcnYxJCfY...@giganews.com...

All the better.. ;-)

Aidan Tynan

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Oct 31, 2002, 9:29:56 PM10/31/02
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Paul Heslop wrote in message <3DC1997E...@blueyonder.co.uk>...

>JAS Carter wrote:
>>
>> On Thu, 31 Oct 2002 11:29:11 -0500, in alt.arts.poetry.comments "M.B."
>> <bril...@hotmail.com> view hallooed:
>>
>> >He sleeps like a pup fat
>>
>> That's just an awful linebreak, MB.
>>
>I agree, I thought it was miss typed puppy fat

A belly like a poisoned pup.


-Aidan

Paul Heslop

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Oct 31, 2002, 11:07:14 PM10/31/02
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Aidan Tynan wrote:
>
> Paul Heslop wrote in message <3DC1997E...@blueyonder.co.uk>...
> >JAS Carter wrote:
> >>
> >> On Thu, 31 Oct 2002 11:29:11 -0500, in alt.arts.poetry.comments "M.B."
> >> <bril...@hotmail.com> view hallooed:
> >>
> >> >He sleeps like a pup fat
> >>
> >> That's just an awful linebreak, MB.
> >>
> >I agree, I thought it was miss typed puppy fat
>
> A belly like a poisoned pup.
>
> -Aidan
>
ouch, just had an image of fat little pink bellied puppies! yuk!

--
Paul. (And I don't believe in the existence of angels...)

cajun96

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Oct 31, 2002, 11:57:07 PM10/31/02
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Yes, I think that Portrait of a Napping Child would be a much better title
for this. I really enjoyed it!
With kindest regards,
Elaine

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Mark Brown

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Nov 1, 2002, 12:35:51 AM11/1/02
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"cajun96" <ERT-LAFAYETTE.@worldnet.att.net> wrote in message
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> Yes, I think that Portrait of a Napping Child would be a much better title
> for this. I really enjoyed it!
> With kindest regards,
> Elaine

Wow, thank you, Elaine. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Since I'm as bad at
titles as I am at line breaks, I'll take your advice.

Peace and kind regards returned,
Mark

Bindi

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Nov 1, 2002, 1:29:20 PM11/1/02
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Hi, Mark.
Apart from the nits already picked,
I enjoyed the voice and mood of this.
Thank you for the read.

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Bindi
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for you are crunchy
and taste good
with ketchup."
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Paul Heslop

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Nov 1, 2002, 2:28:18 PM11/1/02
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Bindi wrote:
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> Hi, Mark.
> Apart from the nits already picked,
> I enjoyed the voice and mood of this.
> Thank you for the read.
>
> --
> ---
> Bindi

Oh no, the poor kid has nits too?


:O)

Bindi

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Nov 1, 2002, 2:51:02 PM11/1/02
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"Paul Heslop" <paul....@blueyonder.co.uk> wrote in message
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> Bindi wrote:
> >
> > Hi, Mark.
> > Apart from the nits already picked,
> > I enjoyed the voice and mood of this.
> > Thank you for the read.
> >
> > --
> > ---
> > Bindi
>
> Oh no, the poor kid has nits too?
>
>
> :O)
>
> --
> Paul. (And I don't believe in the existence of angels...)

Heh!
Could be worse! They could be puppy fleas!

Bindi
scratching

Aidan Tynan

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Nov 1, 2002, 4:16:24 PM11/1/02
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>>
>ouch, just had an image of fat little pink bellied puppies! yuk!

It's an image from Joyce rerouted through Muldoon.

-Aidan

Paul Heslop

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Nov 1, 2002, 6:46:21 PM11/1/02
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Aidan Tynan wrote:
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> >>
> >ouch, just had an image of fat little pink bellied puppies! yuk!
>
> It's an image from Joyce rerouted through Muldoon.
>
> -Aidan
>
well it's still nauseating :O)

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Paul Heslop

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Nov 1, 2002, 6:46:49 PM11/1/02
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Or cat fleas! argh

--
Paul. (god money's not looking for the cure...)

Poe Witticism

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Nov 3, 2002, 8:27:32 AM11/3/02
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"M.B." <bril...@hotmail.com> wrote in message news:<3rCdnYGt_un...@giganews.com>...
> He sleeps like a pup fat
> on chow. Eyes closed
> into wooly worms.
> White, fine hairs float
> on his cheek, shine
> from the slant light handed
> through the window, a gift from
> the afternoon that spreads
> across his salmon lips.
> He wears peace
> like a tarp over art yet viewed.

Do you read 'You're' by Plath before writing this? It seems quite
heavily influenced. Nothing more to add, apart from what's already
been said really.

T.S.Eliot

Mark Brown

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"Poe Witticism" <PoeWit...@hotmail.com> wrote in message
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I've probably read it at some point, since I've read lots of Plath, but that
particular poem doesn't come to mind. I'm certainly curious now, and will
look it up. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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